Wednesday, November 02, 2005

FIREWORKS AND FACES for PLAYGROUND # 4



LifeLines November 2005 - Write it with Fireworks

Put a Banger up its Behind. Light it with sparkle, give it crackle, snap and bang! The effort of getting a story onto the page, finding the right voice, untangling past tense, present and passive – it all seems so difficult and then your tutor asks you to consider elaborate prose! At that point perhaps you think forget it. But actually, writing prose that’s alight and burning with a flame of its own could solve all your problems like a bucket of water over squabbling cats.

John carried the suitcase out to the car, feeling he shouldn’t have agreed to his daughter’s leaving. He had tried to warn Lisa of the dangers of marrying an aspiring rock star and his repeated efforts to engineer romances with better sorts of fellows made her all the more stubborn. Now he was ashamed of the clothes she wore and of those inside the case.

Make your sentences deeply instinctual and defiant!

John wanted to throw his daughter’s suitcase down the steps to the car. Let it thump on every stair, hammering into Lisa some kind of sense: that marrying a wannabe rock star was disastrous and final as far as he was concerned. Cruel satisfaction clipped his thoughts as he pictured the case falling open and dispersing her numerous ragged jeans and beaded jackets into the path of oncoming traffic. Better still if it were smashed to smithereens by one of his young colleagues. That would serve her right for rejecting every one of their romantic submissions. . .

It doesn’t reveal John’s own part in matchmaking but you get the gist and you have to admit, there’s more meat in the second description, yet it’s not so clumsy. Think fireworks. Does it come from your heart? Think colour, drama, defiance; and your prose will light up the sky.

© Bernie Ross 2005

GET PUBLISHED IN A WEEKLY

GET PUBLISHED ONLINE: GET PUBLISHED IN A WEEKLY
A few weeks ago I wrote to My Weekly asking if there was any reason students should be wary of being published on a ‘low-volume’ traffic website like Writing Life in case it should jeopardise the chance of the work being accepted in the magazine. Here is the reply I received within about three weeks:

Dear Bernie,

Thank you for your letter addressed to Harrison Watson (who has now retired).

Please do not discourage your students from submitting work to My Weekly just because this has been published on low-volume writers' websites. All we would ask is that students should disclose any previous publication of their work when they submit it, as the publication history may dictate the rights we can buy if the work is acceptable.

If you would like to receive copies of our contributors' guidelines, please do not hesitate to get in touch.

Best wishes,

Sally

Sally Hampton
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Email: shampton@dcthomson.co.uk

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CHANGING FACES by Lynda E Blake

It was Tom’s idea. I pulled a face and resisted, but gradually he won me round. I knew he was right; we needed to spend more time together. Lately it was always work, the kids, or something…

We arrived before most people, but at least we found the best spot for the bonfire. And as I stared down at the jumbled pile of wood watching how it struggled for life, I realised how much it was like Tom and me. Just like the fire we were struggling to survive: struggling to find the missing spark that would re-ignite our relationship.

Shivering I realised that just as our layers of clothes couldn’t quite keep out the cold night air, the layers of life we placed around us couldn’t quite keep away the chill from our hearts.

As the flames grew and the people gathered, the shadows making patterns on their faces in the darkness, Tom took my hand. Suddenly I was so aware of his closeness. There was just the bonfire and Tom.

At first I hardly noticed the fireworks, until Tom whispered in my ear, “I love you.” So he’d felt it too?

The world around me erupted into a cascade of colourful light and laughter. Suddenly I knew we’d rekindled the fire. Our faces said it all…

THE END

© Lynda E. Blake 2005


When Lynda Blake was fourteen she had a devastating cycling accident, but far from this ruining her life she has since earned many Home Study certificates, and a BSc Honours degree with the Open University.

Her joy in writing is a reminder that anything is possible if we want it badly enough.

[Lynda is visually impaired and does the email-only WL course at
www.writing-in-a-nutshell.net/ using a screenreader called ‘Jaws’. You can contact her on lynda@lyndab.freeserve.co.uk because she can’t easily get to the message board, as Jaws doesn’t seem to like it. ]

DID YOU KNOW?

There are nine orders of angels? In descending order:
Seraphim
Cherubim
Thrones
Dominations/Dominions

Virtues
Powers
Principalities
Archangels
Angels

(Confirming that I am, humbly, an angel. BR.)

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Do you know what a poetaster is?

It's a poet of poor quality!

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WARM AND WONDERFUL QUOTES

“Books are not made for furniture, but there is nothing else that so beautifully furnishes a house." ~ Henry Ward Beecher (1813 - 1887), US abolitionist & clergyman.

Commenting on a complaint from a Mr. Arthur Purdey about a large gas bill, a spokesman for North West Gas said, "We agree it was rather high for the time of year. It's possible Mr. Purdey has been charged for the gas used up during the explosion that destroyed his house." (The Daily Telegraph)

“Reading, after a certain age, diverts the mind too much from its creative pursuits. Any man who reads too much and uses his own brain too little falls into lazy habits. “ ~ Albert Einstein (1879 - 1955)

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IT’S THE WAY YOU TELL IT

I’ve been approached but Brad Ashton, writer of The Funny Thing about Writing Comedy, and he has sent me a copy of his book in return for some advice. He says:

“It has been described as superb by The Association of Writers' Groups and The Cartoonists Club of Gt. Britain and WRITERS' FORUM magazine who have serialised four chapters from it. It is a follow-on from my earlier book HOW TO WRITE COMEDY which, though now out-of-print, is still used in many universities for their Media & Communications courses.”
The price is normally £12.50 but he’ll sell it to you for £10. Say you’re a Writing Life student. Cheques to: BRAD ASHTON. 7, Abbotshall Avenue, Southgate, London N14 7JU Tel: 0208 886 5343 email:
ashtons@london.com

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OUR BABY by Deborah Raine

by Deborah Raine

He has good days and bad days. I’m always there for him. He feels it more than me, you see. Well, he would.

Today is a bad day. It started at the breakfast table, “I keep seeing her…sleeping in her cot. Just sleeping,” he muttered.

It’s been a year now. A year without Amy. A year of torment and anguish for one of us. He just can’t see it my way. Because he doesn’t know. If I could only make him see…but I can’t. Would it make him feel better? Would he understand? No, of course not.

Let him believe in Cot Death.

But, can I let him go through this inner turmoil much longer? Maybe, if I explain that I did it for us…make him see that Amy was not going to repair our marriage.

He’d feel better, knowing Amy experienced no pain; that it was quick and easy. As I held the pillow over her tiny face, it wasn’t long before she fell limp.

If I choose the right words, maybe…just maybe, he will see why I couldn’t allow Amy to live. If he had experienced the shrill in my head each time she cried, if he had looked into her eyes and saw hatred staring back at him too, he would understand. Amy was the devil. She would have torn us apart.

We won’t have anymore babies. Nothing will interfere with my head. Never. But I won’t tell him that.

© Deborah Raine 2005

Debs needs no biog for most readers. She is ex-WL student and ex-WL ezine ‘The Muse’ editor and is as busy as ever with ideas, websites and forums:

Wet Ink http://www.wetink.biz/
Novel a Year http://www.novel-a-year.com/
Open Forum http://carryonwriting.invisionzone.com/index.php
NAY Forum http://novel-a-year.invisionzone.com/index.php

Prestigious Competition

Have you ever read a short story by V.S. Pritchett? ‘The Evils of Spain’ is the title of one and ‘Cocky Olly’ is another, I guess there are a whole lot more.

And do you read The London Magazine? The only reason I ask is that the 2006 V.S Pritchett Memorial Prize for a short story will be judged by The London Magazine’s editor (and others) and the winning story will receive £1000 and publication in said magazine. Closing date is 14th February 2006


The seventh annual prize, ‘founded to commemorate the centenary of an author who is widely regarded as the finest English short-story writer of the 20th century’, is hoped to tempt other writers to honour V.S. Pritchett by being as different as they choose. You can do it in 2000 to 5000 words but entry costs £5. Entry forms are from info@rslit.org or The Royal Society of Literature, Somerset House, Strand, London WC2R 1LA. “It’s a great opportunity to write very freely – an unusual proposition for many competitions,” says Sally Ratcliffe who sent me a handful of forms too.

PUNCH by Steve Goldsmith

He comes in through the front door and slams it. I know he is in a foul mood again. He thumps down the stairs. The door flies open and smashes the wall – paint cracks and drops to the floor as he flicks the light.

He hits me once and twice, then again, again, again at an increasing pace and ferocity, releasing his pent-up aggression. Pain shoots through me, my body concaved, finding it difficult to breathe.

Finally, the assault is over. The light goes out and he runs up the stairs. He leaves me in too much agony to think straight, swinging helplessly from the wall.

© Steve Goldsmith

Steve is 26, an intrepid traveller, taking temp work (currently in Kent, UK) to save the dosh between travel trips which list so far Denmark, India, Thailand, USA and South Africa. He says, “If I can write something in the morning I tend to feel good for the rest of the day.”
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The Sexual Life of Catherine M.

– a Review by B. R.

I heard about this book on the discussion programme, ‘A Good Read’, on Radio 4. I was intrigued but with no intention of looking for it, I happened upon it some months later whilst on a journey and needing to kill some time in a London railway station. Such was my timidity that I bought a large postcard at the same time with which to cover the title, to read it in privacy on the train.

Either we English live very sheltered lives or Catherine M is a nymphomaniac. I expect both are true. Having ploughed slower and slower to the end, while Rod was away, I was flabbergasted that the R4 discussion avoided the F word, the C word and many very explicit descriptions of this woman’s experiences. I suppose I am equally challenged in writing a review of it, so I’ll give it a try. After all, if any of it offends, you won’t be seeking the book to read for yourself.

The author has divided the book into four sections: Numbers; Space; Confined Space and Details. Believe me, after the first three descriptions of group sex in ‘Numbers’ you’re unlikely to find the book gets better, however much you hope. In fact, like all ‘erotic’ books, it seems, the whole thing is tedious and uneventful. I found no dramatic highpoint, just a smutty repetition of clumsy, critical, unromantic, non-descript sex-acts with men and women too numerous to care about or even for her to properly remember.

Although conventionally set out as a non-fiction book there seems little definition between the different sections: its clockwork sex more frequent than a hearty meal rendering the whole account bland and boring. I feel sure the woman could (probably does) write far more intelligently about her specialist subject as a Parisian Art Critic. Some of the references to art and galleries show that she has a lot of knowledge and has met and observed numerous interesting people. Why on earth couldn’t she paint more interesting word-pictures by revealing their complex minds?

I believe the original French version is better written and that the copy I have (Transworld UK) is quite badly translated. There are reviews on Amazon that rate the prose quite beautiful in French, and one cannot help but suspect that friends, relatives and lovers too have been commandeered to write them.

Catherine M doesn’t seem to enjoy words. Though not very badly written – and translation might be to blame – the prose is factual and monotonous. They say everyone has a book in them and this is clearly the one she was destined to write. I hope it will be the only one.

© Bernie Ross 2005

RETURN JOURNEY

by Ivy Finch

Sipping her fourth cup of tasteless airport coffee, Jane reflected gloomily on the probable effect the delay would have on her husband’s temper.

The scowl on Mark’s face as he emerged into the Arrivals Lounge confirmed her fears. He was in a foul mood. Nothing new there then, she thought grimly but gave him a bright smile anyway.

“Two bloody hours I had to kick my heels at that airport,” he said not bothering to greet her. She could smell the whisky on his breath which ruled out the possibility that he might drive home.

“I’ve been waiting too,” Jane said but it cut no ice. Nor had she expected it to.

“And not a word of explanation or apology,” he said. “Come on, let’s find the luggage and get home”.

Depression settled over her like a heavy grey blanket. She realised how much more relaxed she had been during the two weeks that he had been away. No wondering each evening what sort of mood he would be in when he got home. No interminable complaints about the traffic or lengthy diatribes about the back stabbing which was, apparently, a daily feature of his working life.

There was the usual scrum to retrieve his luggage, which did nothing for Mark’s temper. When they finally left the airport building and he saw the torrential rain he said, “Oh marvellous. I take it the car is a day’s march away. No chance you parked nearby?”

Jane longed to scream at him, to point out that it was four hours since she had left home and that she still had a difficult two hour drive ahead of her but over the years she had found it easier to keep the peace at all costs so she simply said, “No. Sorry. You know what it’s like. But I’ve brought a couple of umbrellas.”

“Well that’s all right then,” he said with heavy sarcasm.

It was now dusk, the rain had not eased and she needed all her concentration for the difficult driving conditions. She tried to block out Mark’s continuing complaints until she realised that he had said something that called for a response.

“Sorry, what did you say?” she asked.

Emphasising each word as though speaking to a particularly obtuse child, he said, “Stop at the next lay-by. I need a pee.”

This was too much. “Can’t you wait until we get to a service station,” she said.

“If I could wait, I wouldn’t be telling you to stop in a lay-by would I. I don’t choose to walk about in the rain looking for a tree to hide behind.”

They pulled off the road and Mark cursed when he realised he would have to clamber down a bank to get some privacy. Jane looked at the dreary surroundings. The refuse bins had been vandalised and the motoring public had quite obviously ignored the sign which said Take Your Rubbish Home. Chocolate wrappers, cigarette packets and worse littered the lay-by. She was close to tears.

Mark’s head appeared above the bank but further back than before. “Back the bloody car up then,” he shouted. “I’m getting soaked here.” He was still zipping his flies.

Quite suddenly Jane felt a surge of pure rage flood through her, washing away the depression. How dare he speak to her like that. Keeping the peace at all costs would no longer do. She had had enough. Her eyes rested again on the sign by the litter bins. It seemed to stand out, giving her a personal message.

TAKE YOUR RUBBISH HOME. Softly she said to herself, “I’m damned if I will,” then, turning on the ignition, she stuck her head out of the window and yelled, “I’m damned if I will.”

The car shot out of the lay-by and on to the dual carriageway. Mark stared in disbelief as his wife, his luggage and the tail lights of the car gradually disappeared into the murky gloom of a wet November evening.

© Ivy Finch 2003

Ivy has completed her Writing Life® course and is now determined to continue writing and offering her work for publication. This story was first published in The Muse, June ’03 Ezine and on the New Writing page (where it prompted many great comments) and she has several more ‘under consideration’ with various print magazines.

A FRIENDSHIP SUICIDE by Yara Doleh

Accept my words, which are coming out with every pulse of my heart, yet, don’t expect them now to be the same as before. They might though carry the same meanings but the reasons are different. As my sadness now is not my sadness before: before I used to grieve when a flower didn’t bloom for my morning, but now I’m much stronger.

You always understood me without me having to explain; you were the one who found me as a friend, and you befriended me and held me within your pure soul. And I granted you my devotion without waiting for a reward, for you knew that I am far beyond being a hypocrite, and my destroyer would be my weakness in giving the best of explanations. Yet, and on top of all this, you still understood me fully without me putting an effort, and without me trembling with my words.

My sorrow here, and now, exists in the fact that you turned your back on me during the time I was trying hard to comprehend the dilemma that was surrounding me. So, tell me now which path shall we choose if we did not find a helping hand when we really need it, and to which level of honesty shall we rise to, and reach looking for the real light for such a suicidal friendship?

© Yara Doleh 2005
Yara lives in Ontario, Canada and was on the Writing Life mailing list for three years before feeling ready to enrol for the course in October 2004. She has a baby, Adam, now over a year old and whilst missing the stimulation of her profession as a numismatist in archaeological sites, she would love to be a full-time writer.


KICK START, REFRESH or Satisfy your Curiosity

with a Slice of Writing Life . . .

We’ve written to each other and for each other, some of us have spoken on the phone and we’ve popped emails to each other at funny times of the day and night. Happy House has its perks and quirks, a beautiful garden, some interesting paintings, if you like that sort of thing, and an eccentric witch who’s ready to warmly welcome you and give you writing exercises (or artwork or a cup of tea or all three) for a small fee (to pay for her time).

If you want to incorporate it in a visit to a Designer Retail Outlet, Constable Country or Colchester Castle I’m sure I can help you plan it. Braintree is one hour from Liverpool Street, London.

A Workshop on Writing Memoirs could be in the pipeline soon.

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HAPPY FIREWORK NIGHT


See the smiling face of John on his 80th birthday,
photographed by his son, Writing Lifer Angus Matheson.
Take Care on Bonfire Night.